Short Stories

In response to:90 days later...

Tue, 28 Jul 2009 22:28:30 +0200

:-D Love it. It's amazing how many different paths a word can send the mind down.

How are doing and what are you up to these days? Hope you're well, and happy with life in general. Sorry it's been so long, the blog just goes out of my mind when I'm back home, something that will probably keep on happening for the next year or so :-S.

In response to:90 days later...

Mon, 22 Dec 2008 18:36:32 +0100

Fire!!. who would have thought that this one simple word word be the prelude to my own demise, i was stupid to think that i could get away with murder....i wonder how long it takes from hearing that word to the bullet hitting yo..........

In response to:Seven Years Bad Luck - Post 07

Thu, 13 Nov 2008 13:03:40 +0100

Thanks, I appreciate it. I'm getting close to the point where I need to write the next bit so it might slow down a bit if I don't get a move on :).

In response to:Seven Years Bad Luck - Post 07

Thu, 13 Nov 2008 12:46:16 +0100

these are good to read.
keep up the good work!

In response to:Seven Years Bad Luck - Post 04

Mon, 03 Nov 2008 23:33:12 +0100

Hopefully there'll be more to come :).

In response to:Seven Years Bad Luck - Post 04

Mon, 03 Nov 2008 14:51:27 +0100

Cool:)

In response to:Discarded Thoughtfulness

Sat, 25 Oct 2008 17:06:28 +0200

Thanks, and I think I'd agree - and not just to save my own hide :)

In response to:Discarded Thoughtfulness

Sat, 25 Oct 2008 16:58:57 +0200

I liked it- the whole build up and then the shattering at the end. And Jack- it's not just women ;) men don't always appreciate the effort you put into something special.

In response to:Discarded Thoughtfulness

Sat, 25 Oct 2008 16:04:27 +0200

(sh, don't let anyone else - women, more specifically - hear you say that, we'll be for it)

In response to:Discarded Thoughtfulness

Sat, 25 Oct 2008 15:45:00 +0200

nice....and thats women for you..fickle:))

In response to:Dark Horse

Mon, 08 Sep 2008 17:16:08 +0200

hmmm interesting one this is...i really like your style. not hard to imagine and easy to place yourself into...:)the description is pretty good, shows you have a keen eye. i didn't quite get the beginning, but then again i was quite distracted when i started the read. good stuff tho...and i want more..:D

cheers mate. :)

In response to:Dark Horse

Wed, 27 Aug 2008 03:21:44 +0200

I re-read it again as I noted your comments. I missed out a comment. I do like the descriptive imagery. Your words are effective in that sense. :-)

In response to:Today

Sun, 24 Aug 2008 07:39:02 +0200

Glad to hear it, I am quite a fan of repetition, and groups of three for some reason, so sometimes I over do it :).

In response to:Dark Horse

Sun, 24 Aug 2008 07:33:57 +0200

That's fair, it is quite emotionally distant I think. Thanks for the feedback. I'll try and make the next one a bit more intense. Nothing quite ready yet though so watch this space :).

In response to:Dark Horse

Thu, 21 Aug 2008 02:55:55 +0200

I have re-read the story again. There is something about it that just does not catch me. Alas, I cannot be more specific. I am not caught into its framework...I know I am being vague but I just cannot pinpoint what it is that does not "catch" me.

In response to:Today

Thu, 14 Aug 2008 03:28:55 +0200

Not at all...I think it re-enforced the transition or comparisons within life and death. The story is short enough the repetition between Today and "But Yesterday" is not annoying. .......At least it is not to me.

In response to:Fairness

Thu, 14 Aug 2008 03:26:31 +0200

I have read and reread the story and enjoy it the way it is currently presented. It is like a Paul Simon song...it is a thinking person's story. Invokes some thought and relfection on what is happening within her world.

In response to:Dark Horse

Mon, 28 Jul 2008 08:34:42 +0200

have a great time mate!

In response to:Dark Horse

Sun, 27 Jul 2008 13:55:59 +0200

It's kind of you to give it time for pondering. I appreciate all the comments you're giving :yes:, it's always nice to get feedback.

In response to:Fairness

Sun, 27 Jul 2008 13:53:27 +0200

Did thinking death was there for the young girl work, or would it have been better if it was a parent who had died, leaving the girl a world of tragedy? For you, that is.

In response to:Today

Sun, 27 Jul 2008 13:50:50 +0200

Cheers muchly, you didn't feel it was a tad too repetitive?

In response to:Today

Fri, 25 Jul 2008 02:55:21 +0200

Well done....very well done. :-)

In response to:Fairness

Fri, 25 Jul 2008 02:54:13 +0200

I liked the story. Not sure if I would revise it....or if you do, then minor ones. Death is there for a reason and I think we are drawn to conclude that he has come for someone. Actually, at first I thought it was for the young girl and she was making him feel better for taking her.

In response to:Dark Horse

Fri, 25 Jul 2008 02:49:58 +0200

hmmm...I read the story....but I have to think about it for a while before I comment. Mixed feelings here. :-)

In response to:Fairness

Wed, 23 Jul 2008 13:28:59 +0200

Hmm, maybe I should revise it?

In response to:Fairness

Sun, 20 Jul 2008 20:30:34 +0200

sorry no i thought that death had given the girl a reprieve..sorry!

In response to:Fairness

Sun, 20 Jul 2008 01:22:46 +0200

Did it make it obvious that one of her family just died?

In response to:Fairness

Sat, 19 Jul 2008 15:34:47 +0200

:)) i like the last line "before returning to her front door and the tragic fairness of life" :yes:

In response to:Meditation and the Death of a Soul

Tue, 15 Jul 2008 02:25:34 +0200

I know...when I am reading something that really fascinates me, I am lost in time and content. I think that is why I actually enjoyed working on term papers in university. It was not work to me....except the missing of much needed sleep.

In response to:The Seven Cardinal Cinquains

Sun, 13 Jul 2008 14:46:53 +0200

Thanks. Can't think that I had much in mind specifically, though it was a little while ago now.

That's fair enough about stuff lingering but I'm glad it helped with the writing.

I'm okay, things ticking by nicely except my general lack of personal time. I find when I have time to do things I'm recharging more than I am actually doing something fun or writing or blogging or anything, just sort of chilling and not working. But, we have a week of holiday for summer so a bit of time spent on a beach will be very welcome :).

Something I thought to comment on some time back was points of view. Sorry this is a bit out of the blue, but I've read about points of view being dangerous things for writers and the best thing to do is to stick to one or two. Can't remember specific times I thought that, but a small (late) critique if it's still welcome.

Glad you're doing well.